Tuesday, May 13, 2008

Quiz time

Go ahead! See if you can find the flubs in each sentence.

1. Rob Beer developed a spreadsheet comparing various budget proposals.

2. The state of Minnesota currently faces a nearly $1 billion deficit.

3. Langseth owns a dairy farm in Glyndon, Minn.

4. Seventy to 89 percent felt they had an additional eight of the abilities.

5. Erdle's body was sent to the North Dakota Medical Examiner's Office in Bismarck for an autopsy to determine the cause of death.

6. He was recently released from the state penitentiary in Bismarck.

7. That includes the pulpit and alter, which were created from trees.

1. Rob Beer developed a spreadsheet comparing budget proposals.
"Various" is unnecessary.

2. The state of Minnesota faces a nearly $1 billion deficit.
"Currently" is unnecessary.

3. Langseth owns a dairy farm in Glyndon.
"Minn." is unnecessary because the story is about Minnesota state Rep. Keith Langseth of Glyndon.

4. Seventy percent to 89 percent felt they had an additional eight of the abilities.

5. Erdle's body was sent to the North Dakota Medical Examiner's Office in Bismarck for an autopsy.
"... to determine the cause of death" is redundant because "that's what autopsies always do," says Forum copy desk honcho Stephanie Selensky. The definition of autopsy: An examination and dissection of a dead body to discover the cause of death, damage done by diease, etc.

6. He was recently released from the State Penitentiary in Bismarck.
Forum style is to capitalize State Penitentiary, State Bank, State Hospital and State Mill.

7. That includes the pulpit and altar, which were created from trees.

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